Too Calm, needs to be a whole lot more dramatic and tense!
In a dimly lit house on top of a cliff, dinner table is being prepared. 3 (alpha, wife, cub) wolves are being leisurely, sitting, reading paper/book. Female is putting on make up.
Doorbell rings. Wolf cub excitedly opens front door, there stands ‘wolf’ friend. Pan around him to reveal rabbit ears and tail. He enters the house, door closes behind him. [dramatic sound]. Rabbit rug on floor.
Cub introduces rabbit to parents, who shake his hand. Alpha seems hard to please. Hand on rabbit’s shoulder, rabbit jumps. Offered drink (red wine/blood/cocktail) from tray held by servant.
Takes tour of house. Passes study, hall full of paintings, rabbit mesmerized, deer and rabbit heads on walls. Lingers excitedly in kitchen full of food. Goes to bathroom, takes off mask and looks at himself in mirror. Fear then stern. (Takes drink from hip flask?) Looks out window, sees poor rabbit silhouettes foraging/breeding. Determinedly straps mask back on and goes back out.
Candle flicker (foreshadowing). Takes his seat at dinner table next to alpha, opposite cub friend. Other animals sat at table in masks: deer, peacock, raccoon. Rabbit enjoys his soup a lot, red, starts to relax and feel confident.
Main course is served by chef. Big reveal, cosh removed. Almost dead rabbit served (head still on). Rabbit shocked and slightly worried. Very tense. Alpha carves rabbit, final breath (sound design – breath-like – stop!). Dropped onto rabbit’s plate. Looks around table terrified, trembling, takes deep breathe. Alpha signifies they can all start. Rabbit sees other animals eat meat. Alpha looking at him funnily so he has to eat. Picks up knife. Cuts tiny piece of meat. Pulls up to face slowly. Sniffs meat, gulps. Wolves looking. Quickly puts in his mouth. Cuts to black.
Back in, Tearing meat difficultly with rabbit teeth. Covered in blood. Gets carried away enjoying food.
Everyone’s smiling at dinner table. Dessert is served. Baked Alaska. Chef lights rabbit’s dessert. He smiles up at wolves then leans in to smell the dessert. Suddenly whisker catches fire. Oh no! Tries blowing it out. Wolves look shocked, person next to him tries to help. Starts to panic. Flame reaches mask. Countdown. Awkward. Wife looking awkwardly. Rabbit starting to freak out. Mask catches alight. Rabbit whips off mask to the floor, person next to him throws water on it. Pause. Oh shit. Everyone around the table speechless, shocked. Cub anxious/disappointed. Rabbit annoyed/scared. Alpha angry. Pounces on rabbit. Bloodshed. Wife wipes splash of blood with napkin. Other guests watch silently.
Later alpha sitting (either at desk or by pool overlooking land) with cigar. Dead rabbit remains next to him? Takes off mask to reveal slightly less ideal wolf beneath. (maybe reflection in water).
The characters will resemble familiar human attributes though be in their natural habitats, emphasizing the higher and lower (wolf cliffs and rabbit holes) representing high class and low class.
why does the rabbit want to be a wolf?
It may be enough to suggest ‘he just does’ but I think without addressing the question you are going to struggle with an ending.
Do the wolves accept him completely? Does he transcend species?
Somehow, I need to make the story more interesting, improve the sound design and probably cut it down. This animatic includes experiments to portray my intended visual language.
In this approach I have stripped the film down to it’s basic 3 Act structure and thought about what I want to use it as a metaphor for.
This version reflects upon those inclusive state ‘prisons’ and formation within oppressive regimes today, such as North Korea and Syria.
Influence by the Industrial Revolution:
The film may also comment upon factory labour, especially cheap and inhumane labour and sweatshops in third world countries: